1. I would like the reader to be entertain. 2. Everything was easy to write. 3.There was nothing weak about this story. 4. The characters were so powerful Dragon Adventures IRA bullock A warrior named Conner was a lonely child because his parents were kidnapped by bad ninjas but one of them were the good guys that killed the bad ninjas. His name is Rasher and wanted Connor to come to Japan to train with the sense i. After a few months, Connor came back to the USA and live with his aunt, uncle cousins. Connor was skateboarding like a normal teen but there was an alien invasion. Connor was ready to face the aliens. He used fire power to destroy the aliens but the leader of the alien race( Derashi) was the biggest alien general and almost used heat vision but Rasher used his lightning power to deflect it and gave his power to Connor and threw a fireball after it was combined with lightning and it destroyed Derashi. After a few months, sense i crocodile told Her Ash u to tell Connor that he needs to come back to japan for something urgent . The urgent message is that there's a ancient Chinese amulet that unleash a mystical dragon that can combine with Chinese ninja forms but its in a cave that is protected by a giant troll. Conner walked in the forest to find the cave and met a monkey that was the troll’s disguise . Connor use an fireball to destroy the troll., he put that amulet in a hole on the statue and the eyes turn red and started cracking and a giant dragon came from the ground and it shrunk into a little ball of light and it emerges with Connor and his ninja suit change into a red ninja suit that make the person who wears the suit fly and comes with a sword. After Connor got his new powers, he flew back to the USA and seen a big destruction. There was a big fireball in a big crater that everybody was brainwashed by Derashi . He explained to Connor that how he had survived and he found out that the Ruben race have reproductive body parts. He got his revenge on Connor by using thunder power. Rasher randomly came and died of poison venom that an evil warlock gave him. so Connor’s new powers were not powerful yet but the dragon transport Connor to the spirit world so he can train and get his new powers. At a gate in the spirit world , there was statues of ancient warriors and dragons . The dragon told Connor that these ancient people and dragons were the guardians of earth and the statues can transfer their knowledge and powers but it can also can't be controlled . The Chinese dragon eyes glow up red and the statues too. A Lot of smoke came from the statues and dragons , but Connor found out that the smoke was energy and it made Connor transport back to Earth and found destroyed buildings and people Ruben army roaming the city and humans getting dissected. Then he found Derashi and almost died , but a light came from the sky and a laser shot at Derashi and a giant mechanical rhino came from the hole . The dragon said “Connor this is your new weapon/vehicle , you can combined with to use as your armor. Derashi said“ i don't care if you got a new bucket of bolts, you're still going down. The rhino shot laser from his eyes . Connor said mega rhino combined. The rhino combined as mega ninja . Connor used the rhinos horn as a sword. For the final attack, Connors rhino sword glow up and made a laser slash that killed Dershi for good. Then the rhino transformed back into his normal stage. Connor said “ rhino , I'm a name you Shrek. Connor and Shrek ran into the sunset .The two accidentally fell in a hole in the ground and there was a new world under the earth . It was full of nerds playing xbox360. They said welcome traveler, welcome to the lair of the knights. The nerds names were Ronald, Mike, Nick, Ben, Tennyson and a lot more of them too. Ronald grab a laptop and gave it to Connor as a gift for coming down to the lair and told him to create a xbox360 so he can play with the guys. Nick took the rhino and put him in a cave to rest. Connor was so excited to have new friends and play a new card game .There was a few technical difficulties , Connor kept dying from a neb He and the other guys got emails from xbox360 , they were invited to a xbox360 competition/convention this Saturday at 3:00pm. All of the guys pack up their stuff and call the airplane people for tickets to go to California for the competition.The guys took a plane and Connor took Shrek to fly. Then they were at Comic Con for the convention. Connor parked Shrek in his pocket because he has a shrinking ability. They went inside and saw everyone was there. Everybody was at lines for meetings with xbox360 company employees and eating a lot of junk food. At 5:00pm everybody was reported to the auditorium. The Microsoft people were talking about the new updates like you can change your characters color, shape of body, you can download computer games on it. One of them said that Xbox 360 live is free. After the meeting , everybody went home, Connor unshrinking and activate Shrek and the guys flew to Ma, South Hadley. The city was fixed and Connors uncle and aunt were alive but they said their moving and he can stay with the guys. Ronald forgot he had a big nice mansion that he bought . He said “ Guys we can stay at my place”. So when the guys came to Ronald's house and he opened it, it looked like a clean big mansion with every room with a big plasma screen TVs and everyone picked their room. Everybody brought their Xbox 360's to their rooms and the guys ordered pizza and the delivery guy came over and the guys grab their own box of pizza and code red’s. The guys were playing cod black ops 2 all night and chatting to a lot of people. Connor was so happy that he had new friends and played call of duty all night. He lived a happy life. Connor just heard on xbox live that some dudes got his parents in a old factory on state st. So Connor told the guys that he found his parents and he needs them to help him and track the bad criminals down and he kicked their butts with ninja stars and Shrek’s mechanical weapons. They became a host of alien technology

Dragons adventures

1. I would like the reader to be entertain. 2. Everything was easy to write. 3.There was nothing weak about this story. 4. The characters were so powerful Dragon Adventures ira bullock A warrior named Conner was a lonely child because his parents were kidnapped by bad ninjas but one of them were the good guys that killed the bad ninjas. His name is Herashu and wanted Connor to come to Japan to train with the sensei. After a few months, Connor came back to the usa and live with his aunt, uncle cousins. Connor was skateboarding like a normal teen but there was an alien invasion. Connor was ready to face the aliens. He used fire power to destroy the aliens but the leader of the alien race( Derashi) was the biggest alien general and almost used heat vision but Herashu used his lightning power to deflect it and gave his power to Connor and threw a fireball after it was combined with lightning and it destroyed Derashi. After a few months, sensei crocodile told Her Ashu to tell Connor that he needs to come back to japan for something urgent . The urgent message is that theres a ancient chinese amulet that unleash a mystical dragon that can combine with chinese ninja forms but its in a cave that is protected by a giant troll. Conner walked in the forest to find the cave and met a monkey that was the troll’s disguise . Connor use an fireball to destroy the troll., he put that amulet in a hole on the statue and the eyes turn red and started cracking and a giant dragon came from the ground and it shrunk into a little ball of light and it emerges with Connor and his ninja suit change into a red ninja suit that make the person who wears the suit fly and comes with a sword. After Connor got his new powers, he flew back to the USA and seen a big destruction. There was a big fireball in a big crater that everybody was brainwashed by Derashi . He explained to Connor that how he had survived and he found out that the truben race have reproductive body parts. He got his revenge on Connor by using thunder power. Herashu randomly came and died of poison venom that an evil warlock gave him. so Connor’s new powers were not powerful yet but the dragon transport Connor to the spirit world so he can train and get his new powers. At a gate in the spirit world , there was statues of ancient warriors and dragons . The dragon told Connor that these ancient people and dragons were the guardians of earth and the statues can transfer their knowledge and powers but it can also can't be controlled . The chinese dragon eyes glow up red and the statues too. A Lot of smoke came from the statues and dragons , but Connor found out that the smoke was energy and it made Connor transport back to Earth and found destroyed buildings and people truben army roaming the city and humans getting dissected. Then he found Derashi and almost died , but a light came from the sky and a laser shot at Derashi and a giant mechanical rhino came from the hole . The dragon said “Connor this is your new weapon/vehicle , you can combined with to use as your armor. Derashi said“ i don't care if you got a new bucket of bolts, you're still going down. The rhino shot laser from his eyes . Connor said mega rhino combined. The rhino combined as mega ninja . Connor used the rhinos horn as a sword. For the final attack, Connors rhino sword glow up and made a laser slash that killed Dershi for good. Then the rhino transformed back into his normal stage. Connor said “ rhino , ima name you Shrek. Connor and shrek ran into the sunset .The two accidently fell in a hole in the ground and there was a new world under the earth . It was full of nerds playing xbox360. They said welcome traveler, welcome to the lair of the knights. The nerds names were Ronald, Mike, Nick, Ben, Tennyson and a lot more of them too. Ronald grab a laptop and gave it to Connor as a gift for coming down to the lair and told him to create a xbox 360 live account so he can play with the guys. Nick took the rhino and put him in a cave to rest. Connor was so excited to have new friends and play a new game console .There was a few technical difficulties , Connor kept dying from a neb He and the other guys got emails from microsoft, they were invited to a xbox360 competition/convention this saturday at 3:00pm. All of the guys pack up their stuff and call the airplane people for tickets to go to California for the competition.The guys took a plane and Connor took Shrek to fly. Then they were at Comic Con for the convention. Connor parked Shrek in his pocket because he has a shrinking ability. They went inside and saw everyone was there. Everybody was at lines for meetings with Microsof company employees and eating a lot of junk food. At 5:00pm everybody was reported to the auditorium. The microsoft people were talking about the new updates like you can change your characters color, shape of body, you can download computer games on it. One of them said that xbox 360 live is free. After the meeting , everbody went home, Connor unshrink and activate Shrek and the guys flew to Ma, South hadley. The city was fixed and Connors uncle and aunt were alive but they said their moving and he can stay with the guys. Ronald forgot he had a big nice mansion that he bought . He said “ Guys we can stay at my place”. So when the guys came to Ronald's house and he opened it, it looked like a clean big mansion with every room with a big plasma screen tvs and everyone picked their room. Everybody brought their xbox 360's to their rooms and the guys ordered pizza and the delivery guy came over and the guys grab their own box of pizza and code red’s. The guys were playing cod black ops 2 all night and chatting to a lot of people. Connor was so happy that he had new friends and played call of duty all night. He lived a happy life. Connor just heard on xbox live that some dudes got his parents in a old factory on state st. So Connor told the guys that he found his parents and he needs them to help him and track the bad criminals down and he kicked their butts with ninja stars and Shrek’s mechanical weapons. They became a host of alien technology